Feed the soul
To write allows spirit free,
Love within the depths of thee,
Hold on tight, never dismiss,
Answers whispered within a kiss.
Crimson, gold, the colours of love,
Pure and white, symbol the dove,
Secret language, loves own code,
Angels descend, reveal the road.
Signs in evidence, shown way,
Joy and delight mark the day,
Belief, love, perseverance!
Create effect, “Coherence”
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Let’s take it one step at a time.
Title- Beautiful. Makes me want to read the poem.
Line 1- This is a great line. Good for hooking you onto the poem.
Line 2- A little old-fashioned, but it matches well with the stanza.
Line 3- For some reason the line is a little bit unclear. “Dismiss” just doesn’t seem right for the line.
Line 4- This line is GOLD! Excellent, illustrates a perfect connection.
Line 5- Descriptive and colorful.
Line 6- The first part of the line is great, but “symbol the dove” doesn’t sound right. Try “symbolize the dove” or “are symbolic to”. It will flow better.
Line 7- Excellent line, just add an apostrophe after the “e” in “loves”. (It should be “love’s.” It is possessive.)
Line 8- That’s a very sweet line.
Line 9-12- Excellent!
Great poem. Loved it! (My favorite line = “Answers whispered withing a kiss” and “secret language…” You have a real talent!
Keep writing, be driven, and always have a purpose.